Wednesday, August 20, 2008
Roller Coaster
Riding on a roller coaster is kind of like eating an Oreo cookie! The first crunch of the Oreo is like the first thrill you fell when the roller coaster starts running. After the initial jolt, it's like the adrenaline rush you feel after the dark chocolate of the Oreo hits your system. One of the most exiting places I've been to for a roller-coaster ride is at MGM Studios, Florida. One of the best among the roller coaster rides that I rode is called "Rockin' Roller-Coaster" sponsored by the rock band Areosmith. " Rockin' Roller-Coaster" is an indoor roller-coaster. The first thing you notice is that it's dark, and the tracks are lighted. When you are riding on the roller-coaster, you hear Aerosmith's music. The ride and the music coincide with each other. We have certainly found a way to package the Oreo cookie electronically in the form of a roller-coaster, and we love them both!!
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Hey Keshav
it was a very ... interesting piece but something that i don't understand is at the end you said,"but we love them both." Who is we??? Nut other than that it was nice, you could have
described more though.
Good job
nikaya
Keshav, your piece is really funny and detailed. Your piece made me smile when I read about the Oreo. Facts what you wrote, which is Oreo, didn't make sense. But I like your piece which is really funny! Great job! =)
I like how the whole entire piece is basically a metaphor, in which you compared a roller coaster ride to an Oreo. The comparison is creative and well described. Also, by giving specific names of the rides provides more imagery, since you may picture it more clearly. The piece is well written in terms of originality and creativity. Though, perhaps you could have used slightly more descriptive verbs or adjectives.
You used metaphor to make me understand, but described more though and roller coaster. For example how roller coaster looked like.Nice work!
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